Loyalty is
one of the most important things you could give or earn in a relationship.
Being too loyal to someone comes with both positive and negative outcomes. It
also teaches you valuable life lessons that prepare you for any other
relationships with different people. You should always be careful when choosing
who you decide to be loyal to.
Positive
outcomes depend on the person you are loyal to. Being too loyal to someone is
not the best idea. However if you are, you must make sure that you will get the
same loyalty in return. If the person is loyal to you in return, they will not
take you for granted which will build trust in the relationship. Trust and
loyalty are two important things that will lead to happiness. When loyalty is
double-sided, it brings two people closer together and maintains a long-lasting
relationship. All of these positive outcomes will lead to a healthy
relationship.
On the other
hand, there are also plenty of negative outcomes. Sometimes one person can be
loyal while the other person is not. One-sided loyalty leads to disappointment
and betrayal. One-sided loyalty creates anger, jealously and tension which
often tends to ruin relationships. Being too loyal also means that you are
becoming too attached. When one person cares more than the other person, this
will annoy both people which is another negative outcome that could ruin the
relationship that you have with that person.
Either way,
both outcomes will teach you a valuable lesson that will help you in the
future. It will teach you how to create double-sided loyalty which is very
important in any kind of relationship. Once both sides are loyal, this will
most likely not lead to betrayal since it is something neither of you will want
to lose. It will also help you realize who truly cares about you. You must set
standards for the way you want to be treated. The way people act towards you will
show you the ones that care and the ones that do not. It will also teach you
how to create long-term relationships. If you have gotten betrayed in the past,
stop thinking of this as a negative outcome and start thinking of what you
could do to avoid that kind of problem in your next relationship. No matter
what the outcome is, you will always be able to build off of your mistakes and
learn how to fix them. This way you have a greater chance of positive outcomes
in the end.
Therefore,
loyalty comes with all kinds of promises. The more loyal you are, the greater
the chance of getting hurt. Being too loyal or not loyal enough will bring you
many problems in a relationship. Make sure you have an equal amount of loyalty
between two people because that will create trust for both people. Having said
that, being too loyal guarantees you either positive or negative outcomes and
in some cases, both.
Jessica i feel this is a well written esaay in which you have expressed your points very well. However, i feel you can make your essay more inticing and have a more completed "feel"to it if you combine two shorter senences into one. When combining, you can throw transition words in their which bring out a pop. Also, adding some transition words like "moreover"and "futhermore"really help to blend it all together.
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Jessica I really like this essay mainly because understand your thesis statement and purpose clearly. Your transitions between paragraphs are excellent. You put in smooth words at the beginning of every paragraph. For example, when comparing positive and negative outcomes of loyalty, you used "on the other hand," which fits the comparison. However,what you need to work on are transitions in the paragraphs. You did not use words like furthermore, moreover, consequently, etc to connect your internal ideas. For example, in the beginning of your fourth paragraph, you talked about double sided loyalty in one sentence, then added another idea about the same topic in the next sentence. If you added a transition word like "moreover" or "furthermore" it could connect the two sentences effectively as they talk about the same thing. So it could look like this if you add a transition word: "It will teach you how to create double-sided loyalty which is very important in any kind of relationship. Furthermore, this will most likely not lead to betrayal since it is something neither of you will want to lose."
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